A Blog Entry on my Writer's Notebook Story

In the last few week i have write a lot in my writer notebook and i think im going to keep on writing the story about im skateboarding i think it wont be really interested for people who dont skate. but there will be some part that they will find it funny like the security trace me with the baton.

why is my story is a good story ? well because skateboarding don't really popular in Vietnam so in the school will have a little people know about it so when they hear about the trick in skateboarding i think they will be interested my story about the skateboard trick, even you can do a skateboard trick down a gap or a set of stairs.

For the last one how can i make my story better ? i think im going to put more dialouges, more figurative language like similies, metaphor, repatition and alliteration, so the story will sound much better and more interesting for the reader to read, and i will put more thesis statement in my story like opinion but i wont make it too wordy, too general so it will go better

Just right topic

my topic is when is skateboard start

and i found a book in library about the skateboard history: http://library3.ais.edu.vn/cataloging/servlet/presenttitledetailform.do?siteTypeID=-2&siteID=&includeLibrary=true&includeMedia=false&mediaSiteID=&bibID=59090&walkerID=1331010123354

this is some website that i find about skateboarding and some of the famous skateboarder
http://webpath.follettsoftware.com/resource/viewurl?encodedUrl=3bdJfJ-LmeUBaPkQqUrZZLnC9ifCg5yNyqAvhERygA0&version=1&appsignature=Destiny&appversion=10.0.4.2+%28rc4%29
http://webpath.follettsoftware.com/resource/viewurl?encodedUrl=3bdJfJ-LmeUBaPkQqUrZZNR_1ZS2whed9NcYlCO3AoE&version=1&appsignature=Destiny&appversion=10.0.4.2+%28rc4%29
http://webpath.follettsoftware.com/resource/viewurl?encodedUrl=QA3e1ZmfGQTyUhHafxGQj0neOyiFmpNgjz0941VV3-M&version=1&appsignature=Destiny&appversion=10.0.4.2+%28rc4%29

i think that how can people create a skatebboard deck is a just right topic for me because i can search in the internet about the information to create a deck and i think there is only 2 or 3 way to create it so it wont go like a thousand way to do it because that going to take me forever to find out

Personal Narrative

Grounded because i'm late

Aaaaaa! “It so hurt Huey” I fell from 1 and a half deck Ollie, an Ollie is a jump from a skateboard. I fell down and I banged into a rock and blood come out from my hand, all the skateboarders asked “are you ok man?” I feel really hurt for my hand and I don’t want to fall any more but Later I went up to my apartment and wash my hand then I come back down. While I accessed the door I hear my dad said, “Remember to go home at 9:00.” then I said “Ok daddy”

It was really enjoyable down stairs at the street; we tried to jump over stuff.  We have a competition for fun and the most things we tried to do right now is pop shove it over a skateboard, a pop shove it, is we try to make the skateboard spin 180 degrees. Well I tried a lot for about 1 hour and I wasn’t landing it yet, I did the spin but my front foot is just keep out side of the board I was really angry so I think it was only about 8:00 and I had1 more hour to do it so I and Huey land it, we were really cheerful we scream a lot because we really happy, so we try to do it again and again. Later on I kept doing it but I still not land it again I fell really angry again, right at that time I think the time is only about 8:30 something so I just keep skateboarding. Then I got the jump again. After a long time I check my bag and see what time is it so is like 9:30, the phone was ringing a lot but me and my friends don’t even hear it. Bi asked “what time is it?” I reply “9:30 L oh man I’m late I have to be home at 9:00 but I’m late for 30 minutes and I got 11 missed call from my dad, bye dude I have to go home”.

While I’m on the way home I saw my dad having a conversation on the phone with someone about his business. He saw me and he said with a terrible eyes and a frown face, he was pretty calm I am sure that he was really mad at me right now so he said “go up stairs and I will talk to you later”. Same with mom she was really mad at me too she said a lot things about “what are you doing? Where is your phone? Why are you late?” she said each word louder and louder. I was really upset about go home late.

My dad got up stairs when I was taking a shower. I was coming out from the toilet my mom and my dad said that I be grounded for 1 month no playing game and no chatting in the computer and 1 day I could only skateboarding for 1 hour. If I make that mistake again I cannot go skate anymore.

My dad and my mom were really sad and upset about me; I have to try to make them feel like I get better and a lot and I am not useless. Eventually, my mom and my dad happy with me again but not as good as before because I always go home late they couldn’t trust me about go home earlier. If only I hadn’t go home before 9:00. I wouldn’t be grounded, what a stupid problem to go home late.

reflection #4

i did do well at my dialog and the things i could improve is explain what is pop shove it mean and my personal narrative was a little confusing to understand and have to write like said and replied when i write a dialog

Blog Assignment # 3: Reflection on Peer Review

the advice that i think is the most helpful for me in my personal narrative is i write it really confusing for others to read, and i have to make it more interested for others to read because i write like skate and go eat something but in a different way so is kind of confusing, and make it more interested because when others read they will like it. from read other students's personal narrative i learn that people make it really interested by putting sentence about the moment that someone really lucky to have or maybe tell that they can do it but you cannot because you have to ptactice....

 

i will try to write more about my personal narrative, add more detail, dialog. my personal narrative not really interesting but next time i will think of more interest ideas because i did not write a lot and it all about skateboarding stuff. the grammar mistake that i have make is the past i forgot to change it so it kind of bad.